Post by Smash/TheEntity on Jul 15, 2023 16:23:33 GMT
NO SHOWS: Lexi Gold, Brooke Blakely, Nathaniel Dixon.
Justin York & Daddy’s Home.
Creativity 7.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 8/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total 27.5/32
Comments
Solid brow beating of your opponent from start to finish. There are a few lines that made me laugh.
The CD portion was a little bit light but it appears you're setting up for something in the near future.
I like the representation of your character. I do however think there are some elements you could add to give a little extra flavor.
Chris Page & First Time. Last Time.
Creativity 9/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 31/32
Comments
Nice sell of your clients and their success.
I liked the reference to those you have beaten when seemingly against the odds.
Page talking about Smash; predicting what he might have in store when asking you to return and defend the world title.
Overall, the story or character development was really solid and sold the history between you and Mac and how Page has dealt with it. Match relevance was high even though you nailed others as well. Creativity scored high as well for the same reason as character development, it all tied together nicely.
You didn’t completely put your opponent down, which is something you don’t see often. Great work.
Mac Bane & One Time Only!
Creativity 8.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 30.5/32
Comments
Really cool graphic to kick off your roleplay.
You sell Mac as a fight anywhere and anyone type of guy
I enjoyed the reflection on the history with Chris. It helped set the stage and show how significant this match was for both of your careers.
You also chose the route of not hitting your opponent too hard. You did well blending and balancing the respect with the bad mouthing.
Overall you told a story that was easy to pick up on and that was well structured. This is an excellent roleplay and you have nothing to be ashamed of.
Kruel & Burning Memories
Creativity 7/10
Match Relevance 7/10
Character Development 7/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 23/32
I like the idea that you traveled to your childhood home only to burn it down knowing how it would affect Kaos.
Everything here worked, you furthered the story, gave a history and turned Kruel into the evil one.
My takeaway was that I wish it was a little bit longer and gave me more. Given that you had a plan to end this, I’m assuming this was it.
Good work!
Enigma & Darkness Settles In
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 32/32
Comments
Nice subtle shot right off the beginning about your opponent disappearing for the hype of this big match and leaving her partner to do so.
I enjoyed the recognization that Enigma has gone through an overhaul since his last scheduled appearance here.
You sold the match like it was the last battle of Todricks career. It really ups the stakes and adds to the severity of what you were both going into. (Might I just say that I love the direction you have taken Enigma and what you are doing with the character.)
The character development/continuing story you have going with your character outside the ring is second to none right now.
I enjoyed the end the most and could reference a few lines right off the top of my head.
GREAT WORK!
Shane Donovan & Bitter Pills
Creativity 7/10
Match Relevance 8/10
Character Development 9/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 26/32
Shane gives a history on Lissie and dealing with industry vultures whilst also paying her respect and letting her know the intent is fully to push her to her full potential. Not what I expected but a good start.
I like the current events reference. “The country is burning”. I also laughed when Shane spoke on which smoke he would rather choke on. Good humour even if it wasn’t intended.
Great storytelling. “You’re a plant Shane” that bit was excellent.
Good ending. I thought Shane was prauding at Lissies previous failures and taking a very superior tone when addressing her here at the end as opposed to the beginning.
I wish there was more but great work!
Matt Knox & Gumshoe
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 31.5/32
COMMENTS
Great descriptives throughout your whole roleplay. The way you describe everything in detail especially in the beginning was awesome.
The mozzarella family? I laughed as I’m sure you intended.
The inner dialogue when Mac arrives is brilliant and had me laughing at times.
You having Mac and Knox relate over the disdain for J Mont really added to the piece and the overall tone and flavour even while it was clear that there is some animosity between the two of you.
You really let him have it in you section of trash talk while also acknowledging him and his success while citing that it won’t be enough. “All you are is me without the redeeming qualities”.
Barkeep conversation meant something and it wasn’t just filler. You ended about as strong as you started and it really took the wind out of your opponents sails.
GREAT WORK.
J Mont & Dark Times Ahead
Creativity 8.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 8/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 28.5/32
Street fighter references had me interested right off the line.
Doing whatever it takes to win and then adding the items you would use to your advantage is such a situation.
Knox took the opposite approach and instead of talking about your downfalls he hit your successes which nullified some of what was said when you were talking about him putting you down for your failures. It was nice to see someone like J Mont acknowledge his losses though.
You really displayed a lot of knowledge about Fremont street as a whole, even things I didn’t know which was cool.
The jeopardy bit landed well with me as did the NSYNC line very creative.
Overall for the time you had to complete this it was a great roleplay. The dark tones represented by the room he was in along with the heavy bearding of your opponent worked but some of it was negated and defended well. I wish I had of gotten a little bit more of the character development but it was good overall.
GREAT WORK!
Todrick Tabor-Ramsey & Isolation Determination & Will To Win
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 9/10
Character Development 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 30.5/32
COMMENTS
Right away I want you to know that your work is and was amazing for this event, your character sold this match for what it was truly going to be. You literally got matched up against someone who was full of momentum heading into this event.
Todrick gathering her things and coming to the realization that she had to leave her husband and children to transform into something much darker once again sets a grand stage.
The handwritten note is touching and really adds a strong touch of emotion and realism to the whole thing. “When this is all over I’ll need you to bring me back from the pit of darkness”.
I wish I had of got more of the day-to-day stuff as I thought that was ultra unique.
Day one was my favorite, seeing Todrick realizing that this was a test to see if she would break knowing that she can’t break or quit in front of Enigma.
I don’t want to spoil your whole roleplay for those who haven’t read it yet but it is a must read and very unique, I enjoyed reading and grading it. There is no shame in this loss whatsoever.
GREAT WORK & a special thank you for always being a model handler to work with!
Roleplay of the event: Enigma
RP battle of the event: Page vs Bane
You all scored high because I feel you deserved it and this was by far the best quality roleplays I’ve had for any event I have held to date! GREAT WORK!
Justin York & Daddy’s Home.
Creativity 7.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 8/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total 27.5/32
Comments
Solid brow beating of your opponent from start to finish. There are a few lines that made me laugh.
The CD portion was a little bit light but it appears you're setting up for something in the near future.
I like the representation of your character. I do however think there are some elements you could add to give a little extra flavor.
Chris Page & First Time. Last Time.
Creativity 9/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 31/32
Comments
Nice sell of your clients and their success.
I liked the reference to those you have beaten when seemingly against the odds.
Page talking about Smash; predicting what he might have in store when asking you to return and defend the world title.
Overall, the story or character development was really solid and sold the history between you and Mac and how Page has dealt with it. Match relevance was high even though you nailed others as well. Creativity scored high as well for the same reason as character development, it all tied together nicely.
You didn’t completely put your opponent down, which is something you don’t see often. Great work.
Mac Bane & One Time Only!
Creativity 8.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 30.5/32
Comments
Really cool graphic to kick off your roleplay.
You sell Mac as a fight anywhere and anyone type of guy
I enjoyed the reflection on the history with Chris. It helped set the stage and show how significant this match was for both of your careers.
You also chose the route of not hitting your opponent too hard. You did well blending and balancing the respect with the bad mouthing.
Overall you told a story that was easy to pick up on and that was well structured. This is an excellent roleplay and you have nothing to be ashamed of.
Kruel & Burning Memories
Creativity 7/10
Match Relevance 7/10
Character Development 7/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 23/32
I like the idea that you traveled to your childhood home only to burn it down knowing how it would affect Kaos.
Everything here worked, you furthered the story, gave a history and turned Kruel into the evil one.
My takeaway was that I wish it was a little bit longer and gave me more. Given that you had a plan to end this, I’m assuming this was it.
Good work!
Enigma & Darkness Settles In
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 10/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 32/32
Comments
Nice subtle shot right off the beginning about your opponent disappearing for the hype of this big match and leaving her partner to do so.
I enjoyed the recognization that Enigma has gone through an overhaul since his last scheduled appearance here.
You sold the match like it was the last battle of Todricks career. It really ups the stakes and adds to the severity of what you were both going into. (Might I just say that I love the direction you have taken Enigma and what you are doing with the character.)
The character development/continuing story you have going with your character outside the ring is second to none right now.
I enjoyed the end the most and could reference a few lines right off the top of my head.
GREAT WORK!
Shane Donovan & Bitter Pills
Creativity 7/10
Match Relevance 8/10
Character Development 9/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 26/32
Shane gives a history on Lissie and dealing with industry vultures whilst also paying her respect and letting her know the intent is fully to push her to her full potential. Not what I expected but a good start.
I like the current events reference. “The country is burning”. I also laughed when Shane spoke on which smoke he would rather choke on. Good humour even if it wasn’t intended.
Great storytelling. “You’re a plant Shane” that bit was excellent.
Good ending. I thought Shane was prauding at Lissies previous failures and taking a very superior tone when addressing her here at the end as opposed to the beginning.
I wish there was more but great work!
Matt Knox & Gumshoe
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 31.5/32
COMMENTS
Great descriptives throughout your whole roleplay. The way you describe everything in detail especially in the beginning was awesome.
The mozzarella family? I laughed as I’m sure you intended.
The inner dialogue when Mac arrives is brilliant and had me laughing at times.
You having Mac and Knox relate over the disdain for J Mont really added to the piece and the overall tone and flavour even while it was clear that there is some animosity between the two of you.
You really let him have it in you section of trash talk while also acknowledging him and his success while citing that it won’t be enough. “All you are is me without the redeeming qualities”.
Barkeep conversation meant something and it wasn’t just filler. You ended about as strong as you started and it really took the wind out of your opponents sails.
GREAT WORK.
J Mont & Dark Times Ahead
Creativity 8.5/10
Match Relevance 10/10
Character Development 8/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 28.5/32
Street fighter references had me interested right off the line.
Doing whatever it takes to win and then adding the items you would use to your advantage is such a situation.
Knox took the opposite approach and instead of talking about your downfalls he hit your successes which nullified some of what was said when you were talking about him putting you down for your failures. It was nice to see someone like J Mont acknowledge his losses though.
You really displayed a lot of knowledge about Fremont street as a whole, even things I didn’t know which was cool.
The jeopardy bit landed well with me as did the NSYNC line very creative.
Overall for the time you had to complete this it was a great roleplay. The dark tones represented by the room he was in along with the heavy bearding of your opponent worked but some of it was negated and defended well. I wish I had of gotten a little bit more of the character development but it was good overall.
GREAT WORK!
Todrick Tabor-Ramsey & Isolation Determination & Will To Win
Creativity 10/10
Match Relevance 9/10
Character Development 9.5/10
Spelling & Grammar 2/2
Total: 30.5/32
COMMENTS
Right away I want you to know that your work is and was amazing for this event, your character sold this match for what it was truly going to be. You literally got matched up against someone who was full of momentum heading into this event.
Todrick gathering her things and coming to the realization that she had to leave her husband and children to transform into something much darker once again sets a grand stage.
The handwritten note is touching and really adds a strong touch of emotion and realism to the whole thing. “When this is all over I’ll need you to bring me back from the pit of darkness”.
I wish I had of got more of the day-to-day stuff as I thought that was ultra unique.
Day one was my favorite, seeing Todrick realizing that this was a test to see if she would break knowing that she can’t break or quit in front of Enigma.
I don’t want to spoil your whole roleplay for those who haven’t read it yet but it is a must read and very unique, I enjoyed reading and grading it. There is no shame in this loss whatsoever.
GREAT WORK & a special thank you for always being a model handler to work with!
Roleplay of the event: Enigma
RP battle of the event: Page vs Bane
You all scored high because I feel you deserved it and this was by far the best quality roleplays I’ve had for any event I have held to date! GREAT WORK!